There's a concept in haiku (as well as in almost all Japanese poetry) called the "pivot word" which is sometimes a simple pun and sometimes finding a punning word within a larger word, or having the words sound like a significant onomatopoeia, or...you get the idea. And it is that concept above all at which I fail. My other effort in this department was much closer to the mark in this respect.
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Date: 2009-04-18 04:01 (UTC)